Subordination joins two sentences with related ideas by merging them into a (a complete sentence) and a (a construction that relies on the main clause to complete its meaning). Coordination allows a writer to give equal weight to the two ideas that are being combined, and subordination enables a writer to emphasize one idea over the other. Take a look at the following sentences:
When writing an essay or a report, it is important that you do not use excessive coordination. Workplace documents should be clear and concise, so only join two clauses that are logically connected and can work together to make one main point. If you repeat the same coordinating conjunction several times in a sentence, you are probably including more than one idea. This may make it difficult for readers to pick out the most important information in each sentence.
However, there are certain guidelines that have to be followed while writing thesis statements, as a reader can comprehend the student's understanding about the subject, just by looking at the thesis statement.
Remember to follow the specific order of explanation in the body of your essay as mentioned in your thesis statement.
► Recycling helps in saving natural resources, conserving energy, and decreasing pollution.
For instance, if you are writing about capital punishment, your thesis statement should not be something like the following.
► Capital punishment is not the appropriate way of punishing a person for a crime he has committed.
This is an example of a weak thesis statement because it is too generic as well as vague.
Just make sure that your research is top-notch, and that you have facts to support your side of the statement.
► A healthy breakfast is said to be an important meal of the day, because it gives the person all the essential nutrients that the body requires, and also help the body in facing the challenges of the day.
► As children love to indulge in fast foods and spend their time in front of the television or by playing video games, obesity has become a common health problem for them.
► Introducing sex education in middle school is very important as many cases of teenage pregnancy have been reported in the past few years.
► Though people argue that examinations cause stress and tension in students, they are important in evaluating the student's knowledge.
► Making uniforms mandatory in public schools will ensure that financial differences among the students will not be known.
Such a thesis statement presents an opinion that may be challenged by another person who has different point of view about this matter.
In the previous section, we learned how to use different patterns to create sentence variety and to add emphasis to important points in our writing. Next, we will examine two ways in which we can join sentences with related ideas:
To make the thesis statement more specific, you can ask yourself why you think it is bad, which will generate an answer that will help in making your thesis statement more specific.
A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about, and will help you keep your paper to a manageable topic. For example, if you write a paper on hunger, you might say:
In the revised version, we now have an independent clause () that stands as a complete sentence and a dependent clause () that is subordinate to the main clause. Notice that the revised sentence emphasizes the fact that Tracy stopped to help the injured man, rather than the fact she would be late for work. We could also write the sentence this way:
This is a weak thesis statement because the reader can't decide whether the paper is about marketing on the Internet or web pages. To revise the thesis, the relationship between the two ideas needs to become clearer. One way to revise the thesis would be to write:
Readers need to be able to see that your paper has one main point. If your thesis expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse your readers about the subject of your paper. For example:
This is a strong thesis because it shows how your experience contradicts a widely accepted view. A good strategy for creating a strong thesis is to show that the topic is controversial. Readers will be interested in reading the rest of the essay to see how you support your point.
A is a word that joins a subordinate (dependent) clause to a main (independent) clause. Review the following chart of some common subordinating conjunctions and examples of how they are used: